FINAL
PROJECT (First draft)
Name
: Maria Ulfah
SRN
: 1401120981
“Definition paragraph about Tanglong Salikuran”
STEP
1 : Brainstorming using questioning !
1.
What
is “Tanglong Salikuran” ?
2.
How
familiar of Tanglong Salikuran for
people in Banjarmasin ?
3.
Why “Tanglong
Selikuran” is popular ?
STEP 2 :
Topic Sentence : “Tanglong Salikuran is a special event from
South Kalimantan.”
Supporting Sentences :
11.
Tanglong
Salikuran is an event that celebration each twenty-one night of Ramadhan.
22. Tanglong
Salikuran or Lanterns parade is a celebration each twenty-one night of Ramadhan.
33.
Lanterns are paraded doesn’t like the ordinary lanterns.
Concluding Sentence : In conclusion, The famous of Tanglong Salikuran doesn’t only caused that event very merry but this event is a tradition since nautical.
STEP 3 : First Draft
“Tanglong Salikuran”
Tanglong Salikuran is a tradition event in Banjarmasin. Tanglong Salikuran or Lanterns parade is a celebration each twenty-one night of Ramadhan. Lanterns are paraded doesn’t like the ordinary lanterns. The forms and models of these lanterns are a symbol of Islamic activities. Such as mosque’s miniature, camel, pilgrims, Banjar’s traditional house , drum, and a replica of burak, etc. To make the Lantern using need some material example : colorful paper, some of cloth, rattan and bamboo as a framework. Most of people in Banjarmasin very like it, because this event very interesting. We will look the fanfare in whole route of parade. They said that this Tanglong tradition has existed since the advent of Islam in Banjar. In conclusion, The famous of Tanglong Salikuran doesn’t only caused that event very merry but this event is a tradition since ancient.
- Lantern : Portable lamp with a transparent case for a candle or flame
- Buraq : a giant bird or according to Islamic tradition, transported the Prophet Muhammad
- Rattan : a plant has shaped long and flexible
- Fanfare : a noisy of parade
- Ancient : belonging to times long ago
your writing is good you can try add a little of what activities there. maybe it will more interest. example : in Tanglong Salikuran there are events pray together, read sholawat, etc.
BalasHapusplease give comment to my paragraph
BalasHapusThis paragraph would be good if the supporting detail further clarified as major and minor sentence sentence, for example, in the sentence Tanglong Salikuran or Lanterns parade is a celebration of every twenty-one nights of Ramadan. Lanterns are paraded unlike ordinary lanterns. Forms and models of this lantern is a symbol of Islamic activity. Like miniature mosques, camels, pilgrim, Banjar traditional house, drum, and a replica burak, etc. To make the Lantern uses need some examples of materials: colored paper, some fabrics, rattan and bamboo as a framework. Most people in London loved it, because the show is very interesting. We will see the excitement around the parade route. They say that this Tanglong tradition has existed since the advent of Islam in Banja. you know that minor clarifying sentence is a sentence of major sentence, here I find the absence of specific explanations of both.
BalasHapusI just want to remind you , do not use a contraction in your paragraph because we learn to write correctly , right ? I think the topic sentence in step 2 should be the same as step 3 is in a paragraph that you made. You must choose one of them , maybe it's obvious .
BalasHapus