One of the places to visit in Central Kalimantan is museum Balanga. Museum Balanga located on Tjilik riwut street km 2,5
Palangkaraya. If you looks museum Balanga that explain about culture of dayak
ethnic. When you arrived in front of the museum, you will look Dragon Symbol. Museum
Balanga have different types collections of Material culture, example: Rotan
chair and rotan tress, because central Kalimantan also famous about the rotan. So,
there are many art of rotan. When you enter the collection room you will feel
the atmosphere of the traditional life of the dayak and there is Betang home
miniature at there. You will find many information about dayak Ethnic. In conclusion,
Balanga Museum will be a interesting place to visit in Central Kalimantan.
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One of the places to visit in Central Kalimantan is museum Balanga. Museum Balanga located on Tjilik riwut street km 2,5 Palangkaraya. If you look museum Balanga that explain about culture of dayak ethnic. When you arrived in front of the museum, you will look Dragon Symbol. Museum Balanga have different types collections of Material culture, example: Rotan chair and rotan tress, because central Kalimantan also famous about the rotan. So, there are many art of rotan. When you enter the collection room you will feel the atmosphere of the traditional life of the dayak and there is Betang home miniature at there, Betang home is a special home of dayak ethnic. You will find many information about dayak Ethnic. In conclusion, Balanga Museum will be a interesting place to visit in Central Kalimantan.
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One of the places to visit in Central Kalimantan is museum Balanga. Museum Balanga located on Tjilik riwut street km 2,5 Palangkaraya. If you look museum Balanga that explain about culture of dayak ethnic. When you arrived in front of the museum, you will look Dragon Symbol. Museum Balanga have different types collections of Material culture, example: Rotan chair and rotan tress, because central Kalimantan also famous about the rotan. So, there are many art of rotan. When you enter the collection room you will feel the atmosphere of the traditional life of the dayak and there is Betang home miniature at there, Betang home is a special home of dayak ethnic. You will find many information about dayak Ethnic. In conclusion, Balanga Museum will be a interesting place to visit in Central Kalimantan.
This paragraph must be use signal words. Example : first, second, after that, etc. Please, give minor for supporting sentence. I think this paragraph is coherent.
BalasHapusBe better conclusion of paragraph is Balanga Museum has many story about Dayak Ethnic.
Try to improve your knowledge about the museum. I suggest you to add more information about all of the features in the museum like: Dayak historical, Dayak clothes, Dayak instrumental, Dayak weapons, and all of the things that you knew. Make a major and minor supporting sentences to bolster up your paragraph. You should keep your paragraph always coherent and not to specific in major or to general in minor. And also don't forget to follow the instruction to make a coherent paragraph.
BalasHapusI think this is a problem in the paragraph begins with a paragraph explaining rattan chairs and rattan trees. The paragraph should explain the atmosphere of the place in advance of its new contents. an explanation of the contents should be used as a minor supporting the museum that explains the atmosphere of a museum, so the paragraph into coherence.
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